Val in Love

[bronwe]

Title:Val in Love
Author:Bronwe
Disclaimer Here: The sad sad truth"]http://inanotherlifeff.proboards76.com/index.cgi?board=disclaimersmain&action=display&thread=1152811490] The sad sad truth
Rating: General
Type: VIP Fanfiction
Genre: Romantic Comedy
Main personailties: the main characters of the tvshow VIP including: Pam Anderson, Natalie Raitano, Dustin Nugyen, Molly Culiver, Leah Lail, Sean Baker, and other cast members of whom I cant remember the names of.Oh and a few characters I made up myself.
Status: In Progress
Warning: None
Summary: My version of Shaeskpears play the Taming of the Shrew using the characters of VIP and a few from Alias.
Authors Notes: *takes deep breath: For those of you who have no idea what VIP is, I will explain it to you ahem...VIP is a show about a girl, well shes not really a girl shes Pam Anderson but you get my drift, anyway, this girl Vallery Irons(played by Pam Anderson), is working a hot- dog stand in LA, when all of a sudden this movie star guy asks her out on a date to this function/party thingy. So she goes to this function/party thingy, and these 'bad guys' show up, and she by pure luck happens to save this movie stars life. He is soo grateful that he tells everyone that shes the world's greatest bodyguard which she is not, so to keep up the ruse, she becomes the figure-head of an elite bodyguard agency named VIP or Vallery Irons Protection.




The Induction Part I




Characters:




Bill Tower-producer for Fox

Jonathan Nader-out of work infomercial actor

Ron Spike-former cross dresser for Jerry Springer show, now Bills assistant later plays Jonathans wife Mary.

Kay Simmons- part time waitress/ grad student






Characters in show in with a show:




Nikki Franco as Nikki Franco CIA Agent
Tasha Dexter as Tasha Franco-CIA field agent (Nikki's younger sister)

Quick Williams as well himself- VIP associate

Val Irons- head of VIP

Johnny Loh- big huge action star from Hong Kong(same as on the show)

Don Franco-head of CIA HQ in L.A(on the show hes the head of the LA mob, but in this fic hes the head of the CIA LA field office)

Peter Owl-rich businessman

Joe Marriot-bank teller

Ryan Angelus-CEO of Viacom CO.

Tom Master-security guard at Ryan's company

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The Induction Part I




[Scene: Bar at Foam]




Jonathan: Why did I listen to that stupid agent of mine (taking another drink)…. He didn't know anything….

[Enter Kay Simmons waitress]




Kay: I think you've had quite enough there Jonathan…




Jonathan: No I haven't…another beer please….[totally drunk]




Kay: No I think you've enough…You need to go home now…We're about to close….




Jonathan: Oh fine….[stumbles outside]




[Scene: Outside of Foam]




Jonathan: Now where did I park my….[stumbles on ground and passes out]









[Enter Bill Tower and his assistants]




Bill: This show is going to be great… I smell high ratings….Can you say Emmy?[laughing]




Assistant 1: I agree.. brilliant idea sir….




Bill: I agree…[sees Jonathan splayed on the ground] Well what do we have here?




Assistant 2: I think I know that guy….Didn't he sell those AB Cruncher machines on TV?




Assistant 3: Yeah, he did…Never worked for me though….




Bill: Who cares who this guy is…He's just a drunk loser….But I've got an idea….




Assistant 1: What idea is that sir?




Bill: Just pick him up and bring him in the limo.. I'll explain everything in the car….




[Bills assistants pick Jonathan up and carry him into the limo and drive off]




[Fin Induction Part I]






Induction Part II




[Scene: Fox Studios]






Jonathan: What...Where am I? Can I get some beer?




[enter Bill, and his assistants dressed up as make-up personal, wardrobe personal, and personal chefs]




Make-up person 1: Your dressing room sir. You're needed on stage in five minutes.




Jonathan: Stage? Dressing room? Did my agent get me a new infomercial to do? [totally out of it]




Wardrobe person 1: Infomercial no sir, that's for lesser people than you... You need to make sure you're ready to start shooting...




Stage Assistant 2: He's right, you're big time producer, on the cutting edge of reality tv...




Jonathan: Me? A producer? No I'm no producer, I'm an actor. I do infomercial's. Ever see the Ab Cruncher?




Stage Assistant 1: No, no sir, you don't do infomercial's you're a serious producer. You've been in rehab for several months to deal with you're drinking problem. Now you're going to make you're return to network TV.




Bill: That's right, and your wife Mary will be so pleased to see you've finally recovered.




Jonathan: Well I guess I am then....Where's my wife, I want to see her....




Stage Assistant 3: Oh you shall, we'll bring her right in...




[Exit Stage Assistants 1 and 2]




[enter Ron Spike as Mary]




Ron: Oh honey, how are you?




Jonathan: Fine. Are you my wife?




Ron: Who else would I be sugar?




Jonathan: Why don't you show me some love?




Ron: Not so fast, you've just come out of recovery, you need some time, doctor said. Maybe later.




[Enter Stage Assistant 2]




Stage Assistant 2: Mr Nader you're needed on Stage Five.




Jonathan: Okay, but Mary here comes with me..[grinning]




Ron: Of course I'll come.




[Exit Jonathan, Ron and Stage Assistant 2]









[Enter Jonathan, Ron, and various other people involved with the production]




Stage Assistant 2: Here Mr Nader [points to chair that says Producer on it] Sit.




[Jonathan sits]




Jonathan: So what show I am producing again?




Stage Assistant 1: It's the newest kind of reality sitcom, called The Taming of the Shrew..




Jonathan: A shrew? Is that like a squirrel or something?




Stage Manager 1: No, not a squirrel. It's a difficult woman.




Jonathan: Well...I don't know any difficult women....or woman [looking at Ron with a smirk on his face]




Ron/Mary: That's for sure...now lets just watch the show...




[show begins]




[Fin Induction Part 2]

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Act I Scene I




[Scene Bar at Suds]




Quick: I cant believe she dumped me!




Joe: Well maybe she wouldn't of dumped you if you hadn't kept flirting with her sister.




Quick: How I was supposed to know she had a sister?




Joe: Do you really want me to answer that? Besides it just proves that you cant keep a girlfriend for more than week.




Quick: I have had a girlfriend for more then a week before.




Joe: Okay, name one.




[Enter Nikki, Tasha, and their father Don]




Quick [turning around] Well, well what do we have here....Mmm....she looks fine....[looking at Tasha]




Joe: Here we go again.[to himself]




Quick [to Joe]: Who is she? [ still staring at Tasha]




Joe: She's the daughter of Don Franco. Head of the CIA....




Quick: Ooo.. A spy huh...Well I wouldn't mind being her partner....[still staring at Tasha]




Joe: You don't even.....never mind I give up....




[Enter Peter]




Peter: Hey Quick, how's it going?




Quick: Huh?[ lost in his thoughts]




Joe[ to Peter]: Don't mind him, he just admiring or should I say lusting after that girl over there.




Peter: Really? Who is she?




Quick: She's the hot daughter of the head of the CIA. [ still staring]




Peter: She certainly is a looker. [joins in the looking]




Joe: You guys are pathetic...




Don: Hey, isn't that Quick Williams?[looks over in Quick's direction]




Tasha: Who?




Don: Him. [pointing to Quick] He works for VIP.

Tasha:[confused]




Don: VIP...They're a bodyguard agency, they've helped us catch many a terrorist.




Tasha: Oh, yeah...So that's Quick huh....He's kinda cute....




Nikki: What? Have you lost your mind! He's such a player.




Don: I beg to differ Nikki, he's quite a capable young man, I think we should go over there and introduce ourselves..




Nikki: What? Why? Just because....




Don: Now Nikki we shouldn't be rude to our colleagues in law enforcement...




Nikki: I cant believe you two! He's soo.....




Tasha: Cute.....




Nikki: Vile, repulsive,......[keeps ranting]




Tasha: Never mind, can we just go over there already?[gets up]




Don: Sure honey, lets go. Nikki come on...[gets up]




Nikki:[muttering under her breath the whole time]




[Don, Nikki, and Tasha walk over to the bar]




Don: Hi I don't believe we've met. I'm Don Franco, and these are my daughters Nikki and Tasha.




Quick: Nice to meet you...[smiling really wide at Tasha]




Nikki: I wish I could say the same....




Don: Don't mind Nikki, she's a bit cranky today.....




Tasha: More like everyday..[to herself]




Nikki: Did you say something there Tasha?




Tasha: Yeah I did, I....




Don: Umm...Tasha why don't you go back to headquarters, and see if we got any more intel concerning Kasnaov, okay?

Tasha: But....oh, alright....See you around sometime[ to Quick]




[leaves]




Don: Anyway, Mr. Williams I have seen what you can do, and am very impressed. You're welcome to stop by the CIA anytime..




Quick: Thanks it would be a honor and a pleasure....




Nikki: More like a pleasure....a lustful pleasure....




Don: That's quite enough Nikki, you must excuse my daughter's attitude I don't know where she gets it from.....




Nikki: Whatever.....I wouldn't have one if HE.....




Don: I think we should go now, it was a pleasure meeting you and I hope to see you soon.




[leaves with Nikki]




Peter: What was her deal?




Quick: I don't know, doesn't matter her sister is hot..And on top of it I think she likes me...




Joe: Well maybe if you weren't staring at her sister.....




Quick: I wasn't staring! I was just looking....




Joe: Yeah for a really long time....




Peter: I have to go back to work now, catch you guys later...




Joe: Bye Peter..




[leaves]




Quick: So how am I going to get with her?




Joe: Uh I don't know Quick, why don't you try being yourself.....wait....scratch that...




Quick: Ha, ha...Very funny....Anyway....I know....I can be you!




Joe: What? Me? Why?




Quick: Well not you...We can switch places...

Joe:[confused] Switch places?




Quick: Yeah it'll be great, you can be me so I can get Tasha for sure, and I'll be you, so....um...




Joe: So...?




Quick: So you can finally ask that hot chick in management out....




Joe: Oh fine...But don't screw me up....




Quick: Okay deal...




[They leave]









Assistant 1:Mr Nader? Wake up!




Jonathan: Huh? Is it over?




Mary/Ron: No, its just started...




Jonathan: Oh okay then, hopefully they'll be some more action....




[Fin Act 1 Scene 1]








Act I Scene II









Quick: This movie is going to great!




Johnny: I hope so....




Quick: You know so...[looks at female extra walking by and starts to grin]




Johnny: Aren't you supposed to be protecting me, and not flirting with the extras....




Quick: Ha, ha, ha...




Johnny: Its true isn't it...Besides what about that girl you met yesterday? What was her name?




Quick: Tasha...Man is she fine...But don't worry I wont be the only one getting lucky, she has a sister....




Johnny: She does, does she? And what she is like?




Quick: Well she's...um....well...she's.....quite a character.....




Johnny: Oh?




Quick: But don't worry, she'll fall for you, if you hang around me that is...




Johnny: Uh huh, okay whatever you say....[laughing]




Quick: Oh you're soo funny....Ha, ha, ha....




Johnny: I'm only kidding, lets go to lunch....




Quick: Okay fine...




[They leave]




[Fin Act I Scene II]

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Act II Scene I




[Scene: A house in LA]




Tasha: I can't believe you don't think he's hot![fuming]




Nikki: Yeah he's hot alright, like Richard Simmons on Prozac[ sarcastically]




Tasha: You're just jealous cause you're not getting any.....[defiantly]




Nikki: Who would want to get 'any' with that...[acidly]




Tasha: Somebody with taste.[firing back]




Nikki: There's a flaw to your logic. You have no taste.[still fuming]




Tasha: Your confusing me for you.[fuming]




Nikki: You wish [In a mocking tone]




Tasha: At least I'm not midget hellcat![firing back]




Nikki: Oh, you're gonna wish you never said that![taking a swing at Tasha]




[The two sisters begin to 'spar' with each other]




[Enter Don Franco]




Don: What are you two doing?




[Tasha and Nikki still fighting]




Don: Cut it out![trying to sound like he's in charge]




[They continue fighting]




Don: Alright! That's it![ physically getting between the two sisters]




Don: Now...Why are you fighting?! [enraged]




Tasha: She started it![pointing her finger at Nikki]




Nikki: You started it![giving Tasha a dirty look]




Tasha: I started it! Whatever! I'm not the one with the Mike Tyson complex![firing back]




Nikki: You are so going to get it![walking towards Tasha in menacing fashion]

Don: That's enough from both of you![separating them again]




Don: That is no way to treat your sister, Nikki.[scoldingly]




Nikki: That is so not fair! Why do you always take HER side?[fuming]




Don: You're the oldest Nikki, you should set the example for your sister.




Tasha: Yeah set an example Nikki[ under her breath]




Nikki: What did you say?[cuttingly]




Tasha: I said...




[doorbell rings]




Don: I wonder who that could be?




Tasha: Maybe its Quick...[dreamily]




Nikki: Maybe its Angelus coming to rip your throat out...[morbidly]




Tasha: You wish!




Nikki: I do wish...




Don: That's enough! I've had it with you two, now you're going to behave for our guests whoever they may be![enraged]




Nikki: Fine.[curtly]




Tasha: Whatever.[curtly]




[Don opens the door]




[Enter Johnny, Peter, Quick(as Joe), and Joe(as Quick)]




Don: Well its nice to see you again Mr William's [shaking his hand], I don't seem to recognize your friend here.




Joe (as Quick): Nice to see you too, Mr Franco this is Johnny Loh, he's an actor from Hong Kong in town filming his latest movie Fist of the Dragon.




[Johnny nods]




Don: Its nice to meet you Mr. Loh, these are my daughters Tasha and Nikki.




[Tasha smiles]




[Nikki rolls her eyes]




Quick(as Joe)[to Johnny]: What did I tell you? She's impossible...




Johnny(to Quick as Joe): I don't think she's so bad....[smiling at Nikki]




Nikki [notices the smile]: What are you looking at?[giving him a dirty look]




Peter (to Joe as Quick): What's her childhood trauma?




Nikki [overhearing]: What did you say? [giving both of them a dirty look]




Peter: Umm...nothing...I....[backtracking]




Nikki: I thought so...[acidly]




Don: You must excuse my daughters manners, She's not normally like this....




Tasha: Yeah she is [under her breath]




Nikki: Whatever Tasha [coldly] least I don't go chasing after every pair of pants I happen to see[ acidly]




Quick as Joe [laughing]




Nikki[ sees him laughing]: What are you laughing at? Did you look in the mirror?[acidly]




Don: That's quite enough! I apologize for Nikki's comments, she's been under a lot of emotional stress lately....




Tasha: Yeah ever since she put her boyfriend in a body bag.[acidly]




Nikki: How dare you bring Shawn into this! [her eyes red with tears but filled with rage]




[Walks over to Tasha and starts to beat her up]




Nikki: I hate you! I hate you![tears still pouring down her cheeks but eyes red with fury]




Johnny[ sees her crying](says to Quick as Joe): See I told you she wasn't soo bad...[walks over to her and puts his arm around her]




Nikki: Don't touch me, you bastard![ forcibly takes his arm off her]




[stomps up the stairs and slams the door of her room]




[awkward silence]




[Tasha gets up off the floor and runs the upstairs and into Nikki's room]




[another long pause]




Joe as Quick: Um...I think we should go....




Quick as Joe: Yeah I agree...




Peter: Me too...




[They leave without saying another word]




[long pause]




Johnny: Mind if I stay? I want to make sure she's alright...[goes to wait in living room]

[leaves]




Don: Be my guest.....[also leaves to go for a walk]










[Fin Act II]

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Act III Scene I







[Scene: CIA HQ]







Tasha [ to Quick] : So what was your hardest case?







Quick: Umm....uh....well they're all hard, I guess till you know, you catch the bad guy.....







Tasha: Come on, I've heard all about you, Im sure there was some bad guy that was hard to take down...Like that Merrick guy, I'm sure he was no piece of cake....







Quick: Yeah Merrick, he was um...really hard.....[changes the subject] So Tasha what you do like to in your spare time?







Tasha: This [firing her guns].







Quick: Uh huh...







Tasha [notices his nervousness]: Are you okay? You're acting like you've never been in firing range before...







Quick [to himself]: I haven't...[out loud] Of course I've been in one before [laughing nervously] We have one just like it at V.I.P. ,I just...um....Im impressed that's all, I mean ours isn't as big as yours...is.....[voice trailing off]







Peter [sensing Joe's nervousness]: Um, I think we should go now....How about you join us for lunch, my treat?









Tasha: I'd love to. But let me get a couple more shots off....







Quick [relieved]: Okay , We'll meet you out front...[leaves]







Peter: See in you out front.[leaves]







[Scene: Out Front]







Quick: Thanks for saving me....







Peter: No problem Joe....







Quick: Hopefully I wont have to keep up this ruse for much longer...









[Fin Act III Scene I]







Act III Scene II

















Don: So Johnny what's this movie of yours about?







Nikki:[under her breath]: Like anyone really cares...[rolling her eyes]







Johnny: Well its about this guy who's father is a respected teacher of the Shao Lin style of Kung Fu, and who teaches his son in the ways of Shao Lin, but then his father gets killed by a corrupt leader of a rival school who teaches European kick-boxing and is threatening to use his allegiance to the corrupt British to get of rid of the ancient ways of Shao Lin and other sacred arts. The worst part is the their both involved in the heroin trade...I play Fu Shang who's job it is to stop the bad guys.







Don: Sounds good, cant wait to see it...[impressed] So Nikki what do you think of it?







Nikki: Sounds great.[sarcastically] I'm sure its going to be great just like the epic movie Dude Where's My Car?....I smell Oscar...[sarcastically]







Don: Nikki, do you have to be so rude?







Johnny: It's ok. The plot is kinda predictable, but it pays the bills.[smiling]







Nikki: See? Even he thinks it sucks....[defiantly]







Don: Nikki , watch your mouth young lady, that was an inappropriate comment..







Nikki: Whatever...[rolling her eyes]







Johnny: Really its' not a big deal, not everyone is going to like it, to each his own.[smiling]





Don: You're very modest. That's not seen in many people nowadays.[really impressed]





[Enter Quick, Peter and Tasha]





Tasha: Hey there's my dad and Johnny and....Nikki...We better get over there before she starts an apocalypse...





[Walks over to where Don, Nikki and Johnny are]





Don: Johnny you know my other daughter Tasha....





[Tasha smiles]

[Johnny nods]

Nikki: Of course he knows her, but he does he know her in the biblical sense....[acidly]





Don: Nikki that was totally uncalled for! Apologize immediately to both of them![scolding]





Tasha: Yeah apologize...[under her breath]





Johnny: That's okay, its not necessary. I understand why she feels that way....[smiles genuinely]





Peter [to Quick]: I don't know why he puts up with her, she's so rude....





Quick [to Peter]: Maybe he sees something in her, that no one else does....





Tasha: Well I'm her sister and I still haven't seen it. [sarcastically]





Nikki: And you never are...[spits back]





[Fin Act III Scene II]





Act III Scene III





[Scene: A bar at Suds]





Quick: Tasha is so into me....I just know it....She likes me better....[smirking]





Peter: Yeah right...She likes me better...She'll never go for you, you cant keep a relationship going for more than a week....[grinning]





Joe: He's right you know. You haven't kept a girlfriend for more than a week...[smirking]





Quick: I so have....[defiantly]





Joe: Oh yeah? Name one? [challengingly]





Quick [thinking]





[still thinking]





[really long pause]





Joe: You know by the time he does think of one, Johnny's movie will have already come out on video....[laughing]





Quick: Ha, ha, ha...You wont be laughing when Tasha's with me...[clearly not amused]





Peter [still laughing]: Okay Quick whatever....





Johnny: You guys should be supportive of Quick.....[trying to sound serious]





Quick [feeling justified]: Yeah...





Johnny: I mean we should commend him, for attempting such a feat....a feat that for him has never been done before...[laughing hysterically]





Quick: Thanks Johnny....I really appreciated that...[sarcastically]





Johnny: You're welcome....anytime....[grinning]



Quick: Thanks for being so supportive….Some friends you are….[trying to sound mad]



Peter: Aww come on Quick, lighten up. Look at it this way at least you’ve got a chance with her, albeit a small one, but you’ve got more of a chance than Johnny does with Nikki…



Quick: Well you do have a point there, at least Tasha’s not the devil himself….



Johnny: Come on guys, she’s really not that bad…



Peter: Not that bad?! Where have you been?! On mars?! She’s horrible, beyond horrible…She’s like the female version of Godzilla…



Quick: Yeah bringing death and destruction wherever she goes….[agreeing]



Johnny: Really guys, I don’t think she’s so horrible, maybe if she were shown a little kindness and love she would come around…



Quick: Yeah right, when pigs fly…[laughing]



Joe: I agree with Johnny, I bet she’s really sweet deep down inside….



Peter: Well I’m sure the devil’s nice once you get to know him….



Johnny: You guys are horrible. You have no idea what she’s been through, she hasn’t had the easiest time of it lately…



Peter: Yeah I guess killing your boyfriend does take a lot out of you…



Johnny [getting mad]: That was cruel. [really getting pissed off]. Maybe if you guys were a little less nasty and showed the slightest bit of compassion, she wouldn’t be that way.. Oh I forgot you guys don’t know the meaning of the word compassion….You’re more familiar with the term lust…My bad…[fuming]



[awkward silence]



Joe: Well, I think we should um….give….her sometime….Let’s say that if Johnny doesn’t get with Nikki in ten days, he takes us all out to dinner…And If he does then we’ll do the same…. Sound good?



[They all nod]



Joe [to Johnny]: Okay then, you have ten days to make her come around….Good Luck…



Quick:[under his breath]: Yeah good luck bro, you’re gonna need it…



[Fin Act III Scene III]

[.::Sith::Bitch::.]

Hey girlie!

This is an interesting way of posting a story. I've never seen it done like this. Very creative. It made me feel like I was back in high school, reading this in Literature class. *chuckles*

I'd love to read more. Post when ya can sweetheart!

S.Bitch

[Reddevil]

Okay, well for starters I have to say that I think it's a good plot idea that you have here. From what I've seen so far. However, coming from someone who'd never seen VIP, I have to admit that because of the style it was a little difficult to understand. Script format is fine, its actually a fave of mine, but when its jumping to and fro, like this story, it takes a few reads for it to start making sense. Although its a good piece and seems to be coming along well, I personally (not sure if anyone would agree with me or not *shrugs*) think it would have even more potential if it was written in story format. It would allow us to picture the locations and get to know the characters better. Theres only so much you can learn about a character from what they say *chuckles*.

~Frankie

[bronwe]

I know. I wrote that fic about four years ago, and I havent updated it since.*sighs I try to write like the play was written, but I obviously am not Shaeskpeare. I just cant think of any other way to write this.. Im good with musicals and song fics... Ive written a few prose fics too, but this was my first attempt at trying to write someting like a play. I was going for the whole play within a play thing, or in my case a show within a show..hmmm..*sighs...I might revise it, cause right now im stuck...Cause whenI wrote this, I wanted to change the outcome of the play. I liked the Taming of the Shrew up untill the last speech by Katherine in which she basically says that wives should do whatever their husbands tell them to. In my fic I wanted my Petrucio(johnny) to be nicer than the real Petrucio in Shaeskpears play. Its hard trying to get across the whole changing your clothes makes you someone else thing. anyway thanks for you comments theyre soo helpful...If I could only decide how to write this fic it would be soo of the good...That and my muse has left me... stupid muse


Garo 'lass!

Bronwe

[Reddevil]

Sweetheart *chuckles* Shakespeare was a genius. NOBODY could be as good as him, so don't feel so bad that you're not at that standard. We all wish we could be but none of us are even close.

I have never read the Taming of the Shrew, although I hear good things. (I'm a nut when it comes to MacBeth and Romeo & Juliet though). From personal experiance, if you are going to take Shakespeare and mould it, you are going to stand a better chance if you write it in prose. Using his format, you are just going to get criticised from here to high heaven. However, if you take an idea of his, you CAN get away with writing it as a play. I think you just need to discover the balance of what you can and cannot make work basing your stuff on his ideas. And don't forget: Think outside of the box. Its the sign of true genius.

[bronwe]

Hmmm thats an idea...Anyway Im taking a break with this fic until I can figure out what I want to do with it. I dont know when Ill start writing it again, since Ill be gone most of August.







Bronwe

P.S

I love MacBeth, Hamlet, Titus Andronicus,Much ado about Nothing,Twelf Night, umm thats it*grins

[Tempted Saint]

*chuckles* Ok Now that I have had a few to sit and read this I have to say it was interesting and amusing. I for one am exceptionaly fond of The Taming Of The Shrew. Well to be honest it is my favorit WS peice. ANd it was refreshing to see it written in a altered format. Reminded me of Ten Things I Hate About You. I liked the characters better in your story than I ever did in the TV show. That's a good sign. LOL Very fun and it was a good read.

As far as the script/play format. I see why you wrote it that way. It sort of put a comedic WS edge to it. I don't see a problem with it. I mean I'd go nuts if all you wrote was like that. *giggles* But it was different and fun. *nods* All in all it was a great little peice sweetie. *hugs* I liked it.


Tempted Saint

[bronwe]

Le Hannon mellon-nin(thank you my friend) I still dont know what Im going to do with this story...*sighs...I started working on another act four years ago but never finished it...Might come back to it sometime, maybe when I come back from my trip..


Navear!


Bronwe

[jadedinnocent]

OK, I finally got to read this. I know it took me forever. *hangs head*

I am not farmilliar with this show at all so have nothing to go on.
But still you had some parts that made me lol ;D

I think you have an excelent flair for humor (and I have told you that before mellon-nin). I hope you will keep trying and persist through the rough spots.

I wish you well on your trip!

[bronwe]

jadedinnocent said:

OK, I finally got to read this. I know it took me forever. *hangs head*

I am not farmilliar with this show at all so have nothing to go on.
But still you had some parts that made me lol ;D

I think you have an excelent flair for humor (and I have told you that before mellon-nin). I hope you will keep trying and persist through the rough spots.

I wish you well on your trip!

Le Hannon, I leave in three days. I wont be online again till I get back...*sighs...Ill miss you guys... Ill take tons of pictures and stuff...Wish me luck Im spending ten days somewhere with no running water(or youll be really lucky if they do), no internet, no cable, no tv....*sighs...But its all for the good of humanity...*grins I would buy you guys stuff from there too if I could...



Navaer!



Bronwe

[alizixiai]

Our brother ,and great friend, Sean Blake recently passed away.I enjoyed playing with Sean who was a great drummer, with the best swing this side of Sydney. Sean had been fighting with his demons for a long time, and well they won.
His drumming was fiery, ferocious, and subtle when required.When he was happy he could play with the best of them!We had planned many projects and I ,amongst many others,will definitely miss him.